all my memories have left
on a long virgin journey
chasing after spring's dalliance
Cafe Writing/ Monday Poetry Train/ One Single Impression
Spring
all my memories have left
on a long virgin journey
chasing after spring's dalliance
Cafe Writing/ Monday Poetry Train/ One Single Impression
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I am still an amateur at writing but hopefully I can get better with each new piece. I welcome any critiques or criticism. 
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Wow - that seems to be written in the voice of an older narrator chasing youth. I love it.
I second Julia's comment, I really liked this one.
I fell in love with the last line!
numbing nirvana
This is wonderful "spring's dalliance" is a great image. God bless.
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Really lovely. Beautiful photo too.
Beautiful photograph and the words are an unusual shoice. Makes you think.
Delightful indeed
Definnitely chasing after spring here. It is playing hide and seek here.
Great verses, truly beautiful.
I love the last line too!
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subtle singing of rebirth... beautiful lissa...
Your poem is very intricate: I have read it several times and am thinking so many things. I hope to be able to write like this someday. I love how you used your photo: it hints at infinity.
beautiful moment, excellent post.
Such a beautiful photo to write beautiful thoughts about spring.
Ah yes, spring is certainly about reproduction and dallying. Love this piece.
Simply lovely photo and poem … filling my mind with dancing images.
Hugs and blessings,
Simply beautiful!
But on reading the poem again, I saw another translation. Chasing after "virgin"? After spring's dalliance? Lost virginity without consent or perhaps having second thoughts?
Methinks I think too much at times. But do love poems with layers of meaning. Just like this one!
Gemma
yes, this time of year does draw one out the window on flights of fancy!
" ...spring's dalliance"--that's a perfect line. Nicely done and a pleasure to read over and over!
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