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This entry is for Mad Kane's Limerick and Haiku Prompt 1. This week's theme: Annoying Advice.
limerick
be nice to mom's pet
mom's very picky about Met
husband nods watching the screen
cat falls under the car unseen
wife soon runs off with the vet
haiku
shake your wist like so
don't twist your hand, use your wist
throws shells at her face
Annoying Advice
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lissa
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Thanks so much for joining in on my first prompt.
You posted at my blog asking for limerick advice, so I thought I'd post it here.
Your rhymes were fine and I liked your punchline, but your meter could use some tweaking to get the triple xXxxX etc. feel of a limerick:
So here's a quick and dirty revision of your limerick that demonstrates the meter:
I'm begging, be nice to mom's pet.
As you know, she is picky 'bout Met.
Hubby nods at the screen.
Cat's run over unseen.
And the wife soon runs off with the vet.
I link to some good resources about writing limericks and haiku here: Limerick and Haiku Info
I hope this helps.
I couldn't even try to write a limerick, and admire your first try
I'll try any writing style once and if I don't like, I won't write in that style.
It's always a nice change of pace to do something new.
I love the thought behind the limerick. A great go at it. Mad Kane had some good advice. I know I'm going to check out here link. Ku, I do. Limericks? My first try was today.
i tried a limerick for the first time since junior high... it really was fun tho wasn't it?????
This I really enjoyed, both your haiku and limerick....I gave it a go myself, found it tough but fun..thanks for sharing.
UL
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